Describing Something

Imagine that you were a best-selling author, such as J.K. Rowling.  Imagine that for every single word you wrote, you got paid $100. Now, this is not impossible, but not very likely to happen. Anyways, how much would you just describe an old man's beard? You could easily get $100,000 in just one paragraph! Here is what I would do!

The old man had a ghastly beard. It was a washed out brown with a little bit of a dull gray. I thought I saw tiny bugs like cockroaches swarming around and buzzing in my ear! All of his hair was tangled into itself and not very presentable. 

I could go on and on! But, that would probably bore you or disgust you. Here are some topics to practice describing in depth:

A man's beard

How disgusting a food looked

How yummy a food looked

What a hobo looked like

What your bedroom looked like

How your house looked like

Inside of an airplane

Use sights, sounds, smells, tastes, and feelings to describe something. The more you practice, the more you get better at it! 

Haiku

A Haiku is a type of poem. It uses a 5-7-5 sequence in syllables. Here is an example:

Hot Summer Day

Hot summer days are . . . 

Fun, relaxing, and joyous.

I love summer days.

Notice in the first line it has 5 syllables.

In the second line it has 7 syllables.

In the third line it has 5 syllables.

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Sensory Poem

There are a lot of different types of poems. One poem is called a Sensory Poem. It describes things: sounds, fellings, smells, and sights. One Sensory Poem I like goes like this:

I was standing on the street when . . .
The rusty old black Cadillac (sight)
grunted a rack-a-bump-she-bang, (sound)
and heated up my cool spot of air, (feeling)
and spewed oily smoke (smell)
all over my mustard-covered foot-long hot dog. (sight)
by Anne-Marie Oomen

Why don't you try writing a Sensory Poem? Email it to me when you are done. My email is l8tg8r@msn.com

Wacky Words and Wimpy Words

What really attaches a reader is wacky words. Or should I say, not using wimpy words. Look at this sentence.

We played in the pool for an hour and had a lot of fun.

The wimpy words in this sentence are colored in red. Here are some words to make it better. 

Tip: To find some Wacky Words, look in a thesaurus. These words below were looked up in a thesaurus.

played (play) -- horse around, amusement, entertainment, relaxation, recreation, diversion, distraction, leisure, enjoyment, pleasure, fun, games, fun and games; horseplay, merrymaking, revelry, informal living it up.

fun -- enjoyment, entertainment, amusement, jollification, pleasure; merrymaking, recreation, diversion, leisure, relaxation; a good time, a great time, hilarity, glee, gladness, joviality, levity, mirth, laughter

Now, I am going to use different words and see how the sentence sounds.

We pleasured in the pool for an hour and had a lot of hilarity.

Does that sound like a sentence you would say everyday? NO! See, you need to find the right words that fit in the sentence. Do you get it? So I will try two new words and see how it turns out.

We horsed around in the pool for an hour and had a lot of glee.

Does that sound right? If you can't decide, try saying it out loud. Then, see if you would say it everyday. I don't think so. I think horsed around is perfect, and I like glee in there. But I think I need to add something else, like

We horsed around in the pool of an hour and had a lot of gleeful times.

Does that sound right? I think it sounds pretty good. If you really can't decide, keep on saying things like, We horsed around in the pool for an hour and had a lot of ______? In the blank space, say the words in order from the thesaurus. You'll find something. Even if you need to stretch the sentence a little bit.

Bye for now!

Lizzie signing out!

Short Story

Here is a short story I have written: (I used colors to point out certain things that back up my explanation.)

Analie woke up to the sound of drums. They were playing rather wildly.

Look at the sentences above. One thing that also sparks the reader's attention is some weird beginning. Also try and use at least 1-3 adjectives in every 2 or 3 sentences. That gives the reader the idea that they are right next to the main character.

"Ugh, I don't wanna wake up!" Analie mumbled to no one. Then she felt tapping on her shoulder. She shuddered and almost screamed. 

Look at these sentences now. Be sure to not use the character's name in every sentence. It seems like all you are focusing on is the main character, not all of the other details that paint the background of your story.

"Analie, are you okay? Did someone just scream?" her mother called up to her room.

"No, Mom, it was just me! I'm fine!" Analie replied back. The tapping on her shoulder continued.

One big rule to writing is to almost NEVER use 3-4- letter word that are adjectives! And if something is happening again in your book that has happened before, do not use the same word to describe it! So, since the word 'continued' sounds a little dull,  will replace it with 'resumed'.

The tapping on her shoulder continued. The tapping on her shoulder resumed.

That's better! So, how do you like it so far? I will continue it in other posts. Thanks for looking!

First Contest :: Fiction

A fiction story contest. Easy as that. Any fiction may be posted on this site. If you would like to post, click "New Post" up in the top right-hand corner. The winner will be published online. :)

Welcome to The YoungAuthors Club!

Welcome to The YoungAuthors Club! Lizzie, here, publishing the first post of the YoungAuthors club! You can be published online here. All you need to do is sign into www.blogger.com with your email address and password and then visit http://youngauthorsclub.blogspot.com! 

Here, you can participate in Story Contests and increase your writing skills!

To become apart of the YoungAuthors Club, all you need to do is either comment to this post, or email me: l8tg8r@msn.com (I use my friend Bella's account!)

Hope you have fun!